London Calling - Revision history

Pam: /* DEPARTMENT OF JUSTICE AND POLICE, BERN */

2015-12-08T19:11:45Z

DEPARTMENT OF JUSTICE AND POLICE, BERN

Pam: /* ZABAR'S GROCERY STORE, UPPER WEST SIDE, MANHATTAN */

2015-12-07T16:49:30Z

ZABAR'S GROCERY STORE, UPPER WEST SIDE, MANHATTAN

Pam at 22:30, 29 November 2015

2015-11-29T22:30:56Z

Pam: /* MONDAY MORNING, CIRCLE LINE, LONDON UNDERGROUND */

2015-11-27T17:29:19Z

MONDAY MORNING, CIRCLE LINE, LONDON UNDERGROUND

Pam at 17:51, 29 May 2015

2015-05-29T17:51:33Z

Pam at 22:31, 26 May 2015

2015-05-26T22:31:58Z

Pam: /* LLOYD'S REGISTER OFFICE, SUEZ */

2015-05-13T17:21:37Z

LLOYD'S REGISTER OFFICE, SUEZ

Pam: /* EUCOM ROOM, FORT MEADE, USA */

2015-05-11T15:02:33Z

EUCOM ROOM, FORT MEADE, USA

Pam: /* JUMEIRAH BEACH, DUBAI */

2015-05-11T14:58:55Z

JUMEIRAH BEACH, DUBAI

Pam: /* LLOYD'S REGISTER OFFICE, SUEZ */

2015-03-31T22:37:48Z

LLOYD'S REGISTER OFFICE, SUEZ

@@ Line 575: / Line 575: @@
 ====USCYBERCOM====
-====DEPARTMENT OF JUSTICE AND POLICE, BERN====
+====DEPARTMENT OF JUSTICE, BERN====
 Carla gets to her office at the Department of Justice. She is greeted by her Assistant who opens her door to show a flower bouquet on her desk.

@@ Line 78: / Line 78: @@
 ====ZABAR'S GROCERY STORE, UPPER WEST SIDE, MANHATTAN====
-Aaron and Naama, a 24 year old woman, are waiting at [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zabar's Zabar's] cured fish counter.
+[[Aaron]] and Naama, a 24 year old woman, are waiting at [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zabar's Zabar's] cured fish counter.
 Naama<br>

@@ Line 648: / Line 648: @@
 [[Category:Episodes]]
-[[Category:The Venetian Cell|1.003]]
+[[Category:The Passengers|1.003]]
 [[Category:Follow the Money|1.003]]
 [[Category:The Age of Nujood (2010- )]]

@@ Line 68: / Line 68: @@
 ====MONDAY MORNING, CIRCLE LINE, LONDON UNDERGROUND====
-[[image:LondonUndergoundLogo.png|thumb|right|480px| London Underground Logo]]
+[[image:LondonUndergoundLogo.png|thumb|right|240px| London Underground Logo]]
 A passenger reads a Financial Times' article about the introduction of a new bank on the London market named The Russian Middle Eastern Bank.

@@ Line 7: / Line 7: @@
 ''Introduction of [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bureau_of_Intelligence_and_Research Bureau of Intelligence and Research (INR)] and [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/USCYBERCOM USCYBERCOM].
-[[I_Seek_You_2.0|<< PREVIOUS EPISODE]] -- [[The Orient Express|NEXT EPISODE >>]]
+[[I_Seek_You_2.0|<< PREVIOUS EPISODE]] - [[The Orient Express|NEXT EPISODE >>]]
 {{
@@ Line 645: / Line 645: @@
 ''-Fan's ties in Shenzhen will alert Najwa of the Jouni/USCYBERCOM's plans.<br>
-[[I_Seek_You_2.0|<< PREVIOUS EPISODE]] -- [[The Orient Express|NEXT EPISODE >>]]
+[[I_Seek_You_2.0|<< PREVIOUS EPISODE]] - [[The Orient Express|NEXT EPISODE >>]]
 [[Category:Episodes]]

@@ Line 111: / Line 111: @@
 ====CARLA'S APARTMENT, BERN, SWITZERLAND====
-Carla hold her house phone between her cheek and shoulder as she peeks down at a Bern Cantonal Police car parked in front of her door.
+Carla holds her house phone between her cheek and shoulder as she peeks down at a Bern Cantonal Police car parked in front of her door.
 Carla<br/>
@@ Line 150: / Line 150: @@
 Aaron<br>
 (cutting to the chase)<br>
-We have been monitoring the activities of a Russian national, Alexander Nikitin, for some time now and it's become difficult for us to nail him as his business moves are rather... in-predictable.
+We have been monitoring the activities of a Russian national, Alexander Nikitin, for some time now and it's become difficult for us to nail him as his business moves are rather... unpredictable.
 AAA<br>
@@ Line 157: / Line 157: @@
 BBB<br>
 (turning towards Aaron)<br>
-AAA's uses our internal network...
+AAA uses our internal network...
 Aaron<br>
@@ Line 185: / Line 185: @@
 Aaron<br>
-Intelligence is not the problem here... It's getting it to the right people and then getting these people to bring it to the other set of right people who will finally act on it.
+Intelligence is not the problem here... It's getting it to the right people and then getting these people to bring it to the other set of right people who will finally act upon it.
 BBB<br>
@@ Line 327: / Line 327: @@
 GGG<br/>
-No offence, but why does the SEC sends you? Why hasn't it gone up the ladder? Through proper channels?
+No offense, but why does the SEC sends you? Why hasn't it gone up the ladder? Through proper channels?
 Dan<br/>
 (smiling at the women at the bar)<br/>
-Proper channels... This here is the proper channel.
+Proper channels... This, here, is the proper channel.
 The women smile back Dan.
@@ Line 351: / Line 351: @@
 ====PRIVATE SALON, THE BALTIC EXCHANGE, CITY OF LONDON====
-[[Alexander]] is standing by the window of a private salon on the 5th floor of [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Baltic_Exchange The Baltic Exchange], looking up at the [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/30_St_Mary_Axe Gherkin] building across the street, as [[Jack]] Markson,  enters the room followed by three other men carrying folders and laptops.
+[[Alexander]] is standing by the window of a private salon on the 5th floor of [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Baltic_Exchange The Baltic Exchange], looking up at the [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/30_St_Mary_Axe Gherkin] building across the street, as [[Jack|Jack Markson]],  enters the room followed by three other men carrying folders and laptops.
 Jack<br/>
@@ Line 378: / Line 378: @@
 Jack<br/>
 (sitting down in a sofa)<br/>
-You know a man from Tallinn purchased the [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Baltic_Exchange#Sale_of_building rubbles].
+You know a man from Tallinn purchased the [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Baltic_Exchange#Sale_of_building rubble].
 Alex<br/>
@@ Line 411: / Line 411: @@
 JJJ<br/>
-Well, not sure they would act on it. This might tip off the Russian instead.
+Well, not sure they would act upon it. This might tip off the Russian instead.
 HHH<br/>
@@ Line 420: / Line 420: @@
 HHH<br/>
-Request assistance from intelligence agencies. We'd have to go through DoJ.
+Request assistance from intelligence agencies? We'd have to go through DoJ.
 JJJ<br/>
@@ Line 427: / Line 427: @@
 ====WHITE'S GENTLEMEN'S CLUB, LONDON====
-''Alex discusses the ZIB case with other Russian expats at [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/White%27s White's Gentlemen's Club]. How it was orchestrated by some in Moscow to seize his pipeline assets before he could cash out through the RMEB. Now that the money has infiltrated the system, he says he aims to lay low not to upset the ones that could reach him (the US). He also refers to fuck ups including the Bern failed hit on a Swiss prosecutor.
+''Alex discusses the ZIB case with other Russian expats at [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/White%27s White's Gentlemen's Club]. How it was orchestrated by some in Moscow to seize his pipeline assets before he could cash out through the RMEB. Now that the money has infiltrated the system, he says he aims to lay low not to upset the only ones who could reach him –the US. He also refers to fuck ups including the Bern failed hit on a Swiss prosecutor.
-''He is introduced to some beautiful Asian escort and while he spends some time with her, he leaves the club before getting down to business with her.
+''He is introduced to a beautiful Asian escort and while he spends some time with her, he leaves the club before getting down to business.
 ====STREETS OF LONDON====
@@ Line 447: / Line 447: @@
 Alexander<br/>
 No Epyks...
 Alexander notices a street surveillance camera pointing right at him as he exits the telephone box.
@@ Line 488: / Line 481: @@
 Analyst<br/>
-I have a hunch that he's reffering to Hercule Poirot, a fictional character in Agatha Christies' novels.
+I have a hunch that he's referring to Hercule Poirot, a fictional character in Agatha Christie's novels.
 Supervisor<br/>
@@ Line 501: / Line 494: @@
 She looks up at Fan.
--Hercules Poiroit... You know anything about Agatha Christie?
+-Hercules Poirot... You know anything about Agatha Christie?
--Well. Murder on the Orient Express.
+-Well, Murder on the Orient Express.
 -Right. Never read it. Not much into murder mysteries, but he is. You read that in China?
@@ Line 636: / Line 629: @@
 At the head of the platform, [[Uri]] shows his ticket to a costumed controller.
--You'll be travelling on your own sir.
+-You'll be traveling on your own sir.
 -Yes
@@ Line 648: / Line 641: @@
 -Welcome on the Orient Express.
 ''-Office of the Treasury and Financial Agency will tip off newly formed USCYBERCOM in order to get the US and Jouni involved into terminating Nikitin.<br>
-''-Fan's ties to Shenzhen will alert Najwa of the Jouni/USCYBERCOM's plans.<br>
 [[I_Seek_You_2.0|<< PREVIOUS EPISODE]] -- [[The Orient Express|NEXT EPISODE >>]]

@@ Line 38: / Line 38: @@
 Philippe challenges him with his barely comprehensible English.
--Yes but this ''naufrage'' was never even declared. ''Sans nous personne n'aurait jamais identifié l'épave''. More than 70 years.... Isn't ''domaine public''?
+-Yes but this ''naufrage'' was never even declared. ''Sans nous, personne n'aurait jamais identifié l'épave''. More than 70 years.... Isn't ''domaine public''?
 Mister John replies jokingly.
@@ Line 56: / Line 56: @@
 -Qu'on peut aller se faire voir!
--Putain! On s'est fait chier pendant 2 mois, sans femmes, sans pinard, dans une mer infestée de pirates...
+-Putain! On s'est fait chier pendant deux mois, sans femmes, sans pinard, dans une mer infestée de pirates...
 Mister John tries to smooth things down.
@@ Line 62: / Line 62: @@
 -As a British subject and as Lloyd's employee, you understand that it is my duty to report your findings.
-Handing a stack of British Pounds to Pierrot who place the mail back in the trunk and takes the money.
+Handing a stack of British Pounds to Pierrot who places the mail back in the trunk and takes the money.
 -Sorry... If you guys would have found amphora, I could have found buyers. At least then, the Romans wouldn't have come after you.

@@ Line 476: / Line 476: @@
 Analyst<br/>
-He usually inverts the spelling of names. It's stupid but it beats our key words recognition app.
+He usually inverts the spelling of names. It's stupid but it beats our key words recognition system.
 Supervisor<br/>

@@ Line 209: / Line 209: @@
 Fan<br/>
 (looking at the glaring sun)<br/>
-To much sun!
+Too much sun!
 Najwa<br/>

@@ Line 46: / Line 46: @@
 Pierrot, who's sorting through some mail on his lap, stops on a [[Isabella's_letter_to_Anastasio|letter addressed from Palestine to Australia]], then continues.
--Well, not a song but words for the least...
+-Well, maybe not a song but lyrics for the least...
 -Then write a book about it, replies Mister John.